▶ Your Answer :In modern society, the more globalization is universal, the more people visit or travel in other countries.So Therefore, there are many chances to meet and communicate with foreigners.Some people think visitors to foreign countries ought to follow their customers and behaviours while otheres argue that host contries should welcome cultural differences. In this essay, I will show my opinion about this debate.
There are many cultural differences in the world,especially between Western,Asia and Africa such as manners during the a meal, greetings in the first time of meeting or saying goodbye,fahion style and even thinking.Because of differences between nationals natives and foreigners,these sometimes lead to serious debate.For example,in Korea, there are various programmes to help foreigners' family.They had difficulty being together with Koreans due to cultural differences when they came to Korea at first.They always had to have debate with Koreans.However,after they learned Korean culture,customs and behaviours,they started to think and behave like such as Koreans. So Thus, now they are so close to Korean friends because Koreans can feel familiar with them.
On the other hand,some people insist the host countries ought to welcome foreigners and cultural differences.Nowadays,we always can always meet foreigners because of globalisation, and It is not difficult to visit other countries.So Furthermore, global vilages were built up.Even thought we are totally different ,nationals may need to understand cultural differences of foreigners these days.
To sum up, I agree with the statement that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviours. However, I think nationals also need to understand cultural differences.
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