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All houses have a television in their living rooms nowadays, if they do not have it, you will think it is quite weird. As a matter of a fact, television has become an essential home appliance. While watching television which can make people's life to active>> make 목적어 목적보어 형태로 그냥 active만 쓰셔야 합니다 by offering diverse information, it has also some negative effects. In this essay, I will compare positive and negative effects of television.
The advent of television was an epoch-making event to human life. People could obtain numerous information selectively through the marvelous box. For example, we can make preparations for the weather of following days by a weather forecast on news. Besides, news which is produced by a broadcasting company which provides lots of information in terms of society problems and trends that social members have to recognize. The Various programmes on TV such as dramas, reality and variety shows give us a chance to enjoy fun and be compensated our emotional empty feelings.
On the contrary, others argue that TV brings about many issues throughout the human's life. Firstly, watching a television for long periods of time can affect personal health, because, during the time, people usually do not move and anything. It would lead to lazy patterns of a life of individuals, therefore, So they would be reluctant to exercise naturally. Secondly, according to some experts' opinions, it is not convinced that all the information offered >> tv로부터 제공 받으니까 수동태로 쓰셔야 합니다 from TV are not always reasonable. It means some distorted information can cause a kind of communication problems in society.
As a consequence, to people living in information age, television has brought advantages and disadvantages. In my opinion, if we take advantage of appropriate information through TV, our life will be smarter than now. However, we always have caution that we ought to utilize reasonable information selectively for development of our life.
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