▶ Your Answer : English is being considered as an official language around the world. Especially, in these days, the ability of speaking is regarded one of the essential qualifications throughout the worldwide >> 한 단어입니다 job markets, so lots of people are are trying to acquire an >> 언어 앞에 관사를 붙이지 않습니다 English to obtain more job oportunities and develop their career. Thus, the languages of a minority groups >> minority 라 할지라도 하나 이상의 수가 있는 것이므로 복수가 어울립니다 are fading away without recognition. With the globalization of a job market, English is becoming more significant ability to people who are looking for a good job. For that reason, a huge number of students in Asian and Europe countries tend to go study abroad to study some countries linguistic skills which adopted English as a main language are usually for English. In addition, some family even immigrate to English-speaking countries for teaching their babies English as a first language. As these situations have been countinuing, some languages are vanished in the world. However, I think this kind of trend should be noticed, >> 콤마 넣어주세요 접속사 앞 because every language functions as the spiritual basis for a nation's cultural heritage. That is, they say the stories of the past and demonstrate the excellence of a nation's tradition and culture to the next generations. Besides, the extinction of languages could interrupt the diversity of ethnic groups around the world. Consequently, some people in minority groups could have identity >>an identical crisis and it would direct to social problems. In short, although English is more important than others officially, I believe that languages should be preserved because they have their own values and special meanings. Furthermore, it requires some exertions at a social and a governmental stage.
오류가 좀 있었지만 본인의 의견이 피력은 확실히 됐습니다 자잘한 문법 실수들이 모여 점수를 깎으니 조심하시길 바라구 글자수가 모자란 것으로 보입니다 글자수가 가장 먼저 중요하게 채점되니 유의하시길 바랍니다 단어의 반복이 있었지만 괜찮은 어휘들도 보여 큰 감점은 없었습니다
Task Achievement - 7 Coherence and Cohesion - 6 Lexical Resource - 6 Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 6 6.0 예상합니다 문법을 좀 바로 잡으시거나 단어의 반복을 피해서 논리를 더 확실하고 다채롭게 표현한다면 6.5는 충분히 가능하다고 봅니다 |