There are many people like to read reading books or watching >> like to 는 ~ 하고싶다 정도고 like ing는 ing하는 것을 좋아한다라는 말입니다 movies in their free time. Some people insist that reading books the former is better than watching movies the latter because it does not allow you people to imagine its stories. However, I believe that the advantage of movies far outweigh the disadvantage of books, even though I partly agree with their opinion. Movies can make plots of stories more exciting and also it is idle to enjoy together with friends and families as their pastime activities.>> 서론 부분을 다시 작성해야겠습니다 영화와 책은 기분전환(유희)의 목적으로 여겨지는 대표적인 것들이다. 몇 사람은 책이 더 기분을 나아지게 한다고 주장하지만 나는 다음과 같은 이유로 책을 더 선호한다. 정도로 쓰면 깔끔하고 좋을 듯 싶네요
First of all, movies make the plots more thrilling and exciting than books by visualizing of its story. It is common that most movies have special sound effects and stimulating viewers with computer graphics in order to make their scenes majestic. For example, I both read and watched the story, ‘The Lord of the Rings’. When I read the book, it was often hard to imagine certain scenes such as battling two armies on a vast grass field or dragons breathing fires to evil monsters. However, when I watched the movie version of it, the footage I had trouble to picture imagining in my head,>> 콤마 빼주세요 was impressively described impressively with its visual effects and solemn background music.
Also >> 문두에 also so and or but은 쓰지 않습니다 movies provide families and friends with quality time people can spend with. It is one of the perfect ways to gather up in one place and enjoy pastime together. To take a personal experience, my family members often watch movies together in a movie theater. Me and my family My family and I >> 본인을 뒤에 쓰고 주어자리이므로 I 를 씁니다 sit on nice and , >> 형용사 연결에선 성격이 같은 형용사라면 콤마를 성격이 다르면 콤마 없이 씁니다 e.g) a red comfy chair comfy chairs side by side and enjoy movies with a bucket of popcorn in one hand and a cup of drink in the other hand. After the film >> 같은 단어만 나오는 듯 해 바꿨습니다 finished, our my family members start chatting about it while going back to home.
To sum up, movies give people a great experience by stimulating peoples’ sense of hearing and seeing with its special effects. On top of that, it is more appropriate media to share experiences with groups of people. All things considered, it is obvious that watching movie is a more satisfying way to enjoy leisure time refresh emotions.
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