▶ Your Answer :
The pie charts graphs show proportions of the annual expenditure in a particular UK of a certain british school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.
Teachers’ salaries were the most dominant expenditure throughout all of the period, with the percentage hovering around 45%. In 1981, the expenditure on educational resources and furniture & and equipment were equal at 15%. After slightly increasing a slight increase, the resources plummeted from 20% in 1991 to 9% in 2001. In contrast, following considerable drop, furniture and equipment skyrocketed from 5% in 1991 to 23% in 2001. From 28%, in 1981, other workers’ salaries except for teachers’ slipped gradually to 15% in 2001, whereas the expenditure on insurance experienced a modest growth with it moving from 2% to 8% in the same year.
Overall, It can be clearly seen that the school had spent annually most of money on educationalists’ salaries, while the insurance had taken took up the least percentage in spite of the rising trend. However, other workers’ salaries with the descending trend accounted for significant proportions.
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task 1에서 6.5 task 2에서 5.5 받아서 총점 6.0 받는걸 목표로 하고있는데요. task 2는 별로 써보지 못했지만, 시간이 너무 부족합니다ㅠ. 어느 부분에서 시간을 단축시킬수 있나요?
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task2는 250자 정도에 맞춰 쓰시길 바랍니다 task1 을 쓰는 것을 보니
task2에서 수식에 수식으로 길게 늘어질 듯 싶습니다
task1도 6.0~6.5 사이에서 왔다갔다 할 듯 싶습니다
서론 부분에서 문제랑 비슷하게 쓰지 말아주세요 단어도 너무 같았습니다
우선 task2에선 한글로 작성해보고 영어로 옮겨보시거나 아니면 그냥 쓰다가 250자 되는 부분에서 끊어서 보세요 어디가 초과되고 얼마나 초과됐고 어디가 가장 많으니 줄여야하고 등이요
Task Achievement - 7 Coherence and Cohesion - 7 Lexical Resource - 6 Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 6
6.5 예상합니다 |