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In the past few decades, traffic jam has been a serious problem is many countries. People suggested that government should provide free public transportation for their citizens. This essay will explore some advantages and disadvantages which might bring 목적어 어디? bring 무엇을? to the society by providing 24 hours free transportation to the public.
There is no doubt that by providing free transportation to the public will encourage individuals to use it instead of driving their own vehicles. In As a result of this, it could reduce traffic congestion might drop to a significant acceptable level. For example, in Australia, government subsidizey (단어 형태 주의!) the cat bus services ???호주 전지역 사용인가요, Perth지역만 사용인가요..? 예를 들 때 examiner도 아는 것인지 아닌지 주의! to connect from the train stations to the school, universities and main popular locations in the cities. With the free services provided, students and travelers can go to the direct location without worring about the connection transportation ?무슨 의미?transfer?, while some of them will not drive to school anymore since it is so convenientce (단어 형태 주의!) and it is free. It is a huge population changed ??? if students do not drive to school. Traffic jam camn be released a bit by providing free transportation services.
On the other hand, it is very costsly a lot to provide such a huge connection of transportation services in the society. It may lead to the increasing of tax rate to the public. Moreover, it is not essential to provide free services 24 hours for 7 days. By providing free transport within during the peak time already can solve the traffic jam. Also, (comma) 24 hours transportation might increase the risk of the passenger ??? . For example, long hour drive in one shift ??? can affect the cautious level ??? and cause accidents.
To sum up with, government should provide free public transportation in the peak hours to solve the traffic congestion problem.
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