주제 Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age. Some think they should begin at at least 7 years old. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Some believe that children should learn about manners, social norms and general knowledge through a formal educational setting from their early ages, however, others think that 7 years old is a the (참고로 a도 틀린 건 절대 아닙니다. 관사는 그냥 참고 정도만 해주세요~) perfect age to start their formal education. These two statements have their own justifications, but I personally think that children should be (be를 넣을 거면 be able to가 되어야 합니다.) socialize as soon as they can by joining the compulsory education.
To begin with, it is a well known fact that many countries have the same educational policy that children who are is 7 years old should enter the elementary school as mandatory education. The reason why is because many educational experts have proved the perfect age that what age is perfect for starting school and how as well as the effective way of teaching children at their age. They posed that children who are 7 years old can focus on their school activities for long period time and at the same time they could make social relationship with their peers productively. Under 7 years old, they could not have any requirements to start school since children might have spoiled from their parents and they also have lack of independency and patience. For example, about 15% of Kindergarten students in Canada, could not take care of themselves after they had a stool at school. This shows that kids under 7 years old need a little longer time to practice and learn basic social rules through their parents or other educational setting.
On the other hands, it is inevitable true (1. inevitably true, 2. inevitable truth 중 하나로 넣어주시면 됩니다.) that children need to take various education at their early age. Since there are massive double income families family, parents are not the most people who children can spend the most time with and young children should start their first social life in a daycare center or preschool program. This means that not only parents but also teachers and peers could take an important role in children’s development. However, the fee for other educational setting can be a burden for many parents since it is operated by private institutions. For example, a majority of parents in North America, have financial issues about sending their young kids to private schools. The average monthly cost for young children education is around 1,500 dollars and it is more than half of regular family’s income and they cannot afford it without government’s assistant. Thus, young children who are under 7 years old could learn a variety various (이거 많은 학생들이 틀리는 사항이므로 주의해주세요!) tasks by meeting peers and teachers at school. It is really wonderful educational opportunity for them as well as their parents.
In conclusion, although the current compulsory education system which starts at the age of 7 years old is proved by educational experts and history, it should be also provided for younger children who is are under 7 years old so that their parents can be released they financial stress and also feel reliable on their kid’s school while they are working.
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