The table
below gives information about the percentage of adults who paid for admission
to various entertainment events in five nations in 2012. Summarize
the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons
where relevant.
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The given table chart unfolds the information
about the rate of people above 18 years old in five western countries above 18 years old who
attended Performing arts, Cinema, Museums & Galleries and Sports (여기 포함 밑에도 싹 소문자 시작입니다.) by purchasing
admission tickets in 2012.
On the whole, the majority (여기의 경우 제가 바로 전에 넣어드렸던 링크와 동일선상에서 보시면 되빈다.) of continental US
people love to go to the movie theatre, European tend to enjoy all entertainment
events quite evenly compared to the trend of the USA and Canada.
With regards to the USA and Canada, more
than 50% of people watched the films to entertain themselves, it is followed
by Performing Arts nearly 4 out of 10 population enjoyed it. The rate of
Sports stood at 27.3% and 23.8% respectively, less than one-fifth citizens went
to Museums and Galleries. The same trend is not mirrored in Europe. (아주 좋습니다.) When
40% of people paid to Cinema, its rate is closely trailed by that of Performing
Arts with an exception-Germany as it stood at 34.7% in the ratio, lower than the
overall figures of Museums/Galleries. Sports was the least popular event
since less than 30% of people bought the tickets in France and Germany |
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감사합니다.
총평: 잘 써주셨고, 이번 글은 특히 좋은 표현들이 많이 들어갔네요. 패러프레이징 역시 이정도면 잘 된 편입니다. majority의 사용과 관련해서만 조금 주의해주세요!
수고하셨습니다 :)