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Getting knowledge is a crucial component in the contemporary society as well as there is a no doubt that knowledge is one of the most core assets. Some people assert that the best way for learning is indirect ways such as a studying from listening or reading. I totally agree with the opinion due to the effectiveness.
Smart people easily tend to be rich and success in their lives. For those reasons that numerous individuals think to study is important. There are various sources to study, but the easiest way to reach information is though listening and books. First of all, those sources are efficient than experiencing by oneself from a financial and time aspects. From point of my view, I found out that a reading books can destroy barriers to study even who are not rich or do not fully educated from schools. Indeed, when I studied Japanese language, I read Japanese books instead of attending a language course due to my financial condition. Nevertheless, I could pass the Japanese exam.
Moreover, studying from listening and books are better to remember information>> 무엇보다 좋은 지에 대해 하나쯤 언급하는게 좋겠습니다, because those are more stimulative to brain. Accordance with a result of an research, conducted by European Education Associations, it remains knowledge two times longer than a direct experience not such as with common expectation by learners. It proves that the effectiveness of study through indirect experiences.
In conclusion, as I mentioned above, I firmly agree with that listening and reading are good way to gain or improve knowledge. Ones would be better, when they do not be undermined to study from saying being told from of acquaintances and books.
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