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The table illustrates how the class size and the number of primary students in a class >> the number of students라고 쓰면 영국 내의 초등학생들의 전체 수를 말하게 됩니다 in Britain were >> 수동태로 써주세요 changed from 1998 to 2002. It also shows the number(as well as average class size) of pupils who were studying in a small(with 30 or less) or in a large(with 31 or more) classroom.
To begin with, between 1998 and 1999, the number of students in a small class in Britain was about 14,500 to 14,358 each, representing a slight decrease but it is stable from around 72% of students to 70% of that. During this period, the large class demonstrated less students in number and percentage(from 5840 pupils, 29% in 1998 to 6153 pupils, 30% in 1999) than the small. There was also a slight rise slightly , while its total average class size became around 26%. (25.9% in 1998 and 26.1% in 1999 respectively) both in 1998 and in 1999.
Over the next 3-year period, as seen from the table, there were a significant an increase and a decrease. In 2002, the smaller class pupils had a huge growth by reaching at 22,193 of students number with 99.3% of all students. On the other hand, the large one had a considerable fall around 156 students number and 0.7% of all students, showing total average class size at 24.5%.
In conclusion, the number of large primary school class in Britain declined, while smaller one increased much more. Therefore, large percent of pupils chose to study in a small class.
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전치사 문제가 꽤 많구요 students number 라는 단어도 뒤에서 갑자기 연속적으로 등장했구요 large small을 언급하고 뒤에선 the former the latter 혹은 larger one smaller one 등으로 다양하게 써주시구요 괄호를 너무 쓰지 마시길 바랍니다
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