▶ Your Answer : The table illustraites information on units of electricity produced by fuel source in two different countries, Australia and France, in 1980 and in 2000 respectively.
In 1980, Australian people produced 100 units, and the rate of the entire production. Natural gas and hydro power were used at the same ratio, at 20 units of the total production separately. The least one was oil, at 10 units among them. Comparing to the chart of in 1980, over three quarters in total were produced by coals, which is 130 units out of 170 units in 2000. The second largest one was hydro power, which increased about 16 units more than ones in 1980. The rests of them were , oil and natural gas,>> 그 나머지들 해서 콤마로 추가 설명 식으로 사이에 수식했습니다 were at 2 units respectively.
Move on to those in France, there were five kinds of fuel added to nuclear power. France made 90 units of electricity by the same figure of coals and natural gas each, and 20 units of oil were spent for its production in 1980. An interesting thing was French people used nuclear power at 15 units for electricity in 1980. Hydro power made 5 units of electricity. France increased the ratio of nuclear power in 2000, which was about almost nine times as many as ones in 1980. The units of oil and coals were 25 units respectively, and natural gas and hydro power were no more than 2 units in 2000.
Overall, the entire production increased about twice in 2000 more than ones in 2000 in two nations. A noticeable thing is Australian people used four kinds of fossil fuels for production of electricity, which are coals, oil, natural gas and hydro power, while France relied on nuclear power in big parts.
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