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It is irrefutable that the trend of delivering children in one’s old age is widespread in many countries, especially in developed ones. In this essay, the influences on the society and families will be illustrated as well as the reasons >> as well as 뒤의 형태랑 주어 부분의 형태랑 같아야해서 명사로 이어지게 뒤로 뺐습니다.
Two primary reasons associated with the tendency can be found. Firstly, higher education of women is fairly influential. For example, women who have been through tertiary level >> 가운데 - 빼주세요 education have come to pass their twenties, expending a great amount of money on education and dreaming of gaining career prospects after graduation. This, thus, contributes them to pursue, find, and maintain the rewarding jobs, postponing pregnancy until their 30s. Secondly, expectations for higher living standards have a impact on late pregnancy. That is because young couples in developed countries have enjoyed their wealthy backgrounds thanks to their hard-working parents during the last few decades, they feel the in need to obtain the corresponding living standards before having children. Therefore, the phenomenon of procrastinating pregnancy is prevailing in some countries.
Various changes of a family can be found as a result of late delivery. For example, the number of children in one family has been noticeably reduced by just one or two children and, thus, parents can put more efforts and expenditures into their few children’s nurturing and education. However, some sufferings of parents can also be expected to occur such as conflicts from a bigger increasingly expanding generation gap and physical difficulties of a child rearing at an old age. Meanwhile, the total population of laboring youths has exponentially dropped in these societies because of the decreased number of children and infertility caused by late pregnancy. Thus, the government or an authority has to regulate this issue, which induce a labor shortage.
In conclusion, due to the reasons caused by a higher level of women’s education and expectations for high living standards, people tend to have children later in their life. Some consequences from this phenomenon can have both positive and negative influences on the life of a family and society.
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