Writing task 2
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic.
Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives.
Which viewpoint do you agree with?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.
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The issue of, whether now days nowadays people are effected from various advertisements can be a hugely controversial topic and it can cause heated debate amongst people who hold the strong views on this issue. I strongly agree with the opinion that advertisements give more benefits to people.
on the one hand, indiscreet advertisements occur antagonism from viewers. (여기서 따로 엔터치지 않습니다. 이것도 점수에 들어가므로 주의해주세요!)Fist of all, modern people are exposed to vast amounts of advertisements so people even get information about things they do not want to buy. To be specific, this phenomenon takes away people personal time and makes them angry. More over, people are not obliged to be exposed from inappropriate information. People have the right to ignore unnecessary information and no one can violate it. (이 문단은 총평에서 말씀드리겠습니다.)
on On the other hand, some people hold the view that people can improve the quality of life by watching advertisements for useful new products. Fist First of all, in modern times the functions of appliances are becoming more diverse. For example, the latest washing machine also has a drying function thus, consumers do not need to spend more time to dry their clothes. Also, when people saw the advertisement, they would have a chance to buy outstanding home appliances. Therefore, people can improve the quality of life by using these products, and it helps to spend happy time with their family and friends.
As has been demonstrated, although now days nowadays there are lot of indiscriminate advertisement which wastes time, and makes waste of time however I strongly believe that advertising helps the people to chose their live in a more comfortable way.
총평: (6/5/6/5) 5.5
task 1과 달리 task 2는 여러 보완이 필요한 편입니다. 일단 단어에서 인용하신 게 indiscreet, antagonism 등으로 보이는데, 이런 단어 굳이 쓰실 필요 없습니다. 대신 문법을 최대한 정확하게 적는 것, 그리고 철자를 지키는 것에 더 주목해주세요! 특히 철자는 task 1/2 가리지 않고 오류가 보이니까, 특별히 더 주의해주세요~다시 한번 강조드리지만 복잡한 단어 안 써도 됩니다!
본론 첫 번째 문단은 광고의 장점을 다루는 내용으로 대체해주시면 되는데, 이에 대해서는 링크를 하나 넣어드릴테니 정독해주시면 되겠습니다. 수고하셨습니다 :)
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