Writing task 2
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic:
There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?
Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
You should write at least 250 words.
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It is true that, most of people in different parts of the world listen to one or more types of music from another country. There are valid reasons behind these choices of music. It will be discuss both side of view.
On the one hand, some people prefer to listening the international music rather then traditional music. First of all, when people listen the international music such as K-pop and J-pop they can learn other countries music trend and culture. To be specific, music is not just listen to something a lot of different countries and races can feel other countries culture by listening the various foreign music. More over, it is also helps to learn money from the tourism industry. For example, most of young foreigners travel to South Korea because they are fascinated by K pop and these eventually increase state funds.
On the other hand, people say it is more important to be interested in traditional music. First and foremost, recently not only young people but also elders are not interested in traditional music. If these phenomenon keep continue they will be forget their beautiful traditional music it does not just end up forgetting music it can cause confusion about their identity. Also, if people have a constant interest in traditional music they can feel confidence about their own music culture. Ultimately it can occur positive effects to proud of their music culture.
As it has been demonstrated, although there are some positive aspect that people follow the music trend to listen to international music however, I opine that traditional music have more bright side rather then international music.
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Ps.
both point of view 를 많이 안다뤄봐서 특히나 좀 맥락을 잡는데 오래 걸리는것 같습니다,,,좀더 연습해서 다음에는 더 빨리 쓰도록 노력하겠습니다. 매번 이렇게 첨삭해주셔서 정말 너무 감사드립니다. ^^b