Some people think that all
university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should
only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as
those related to science and technology.
Discuss both these views
and give your own opinion.
Whilst it
is thought that students ought to focus on a board range (다양한 범위는 논점과 크게 관련이 없습니다.) of school subjects
that they like, others feel it would be better for them to concentrate only on
subjects that might be effective in their future. I personally believe that the
number of subjects they study should depend on their age.
To be
specific, the younger people with a generation, around the ages 8 to 19 from
elementary to high school need to focus on learning as a wide range of school
subjects as possible to formulate board views in their life as they are still
immature. Studying and experiencing various subjects in a school the most effective way to develop a career understanding of their skills and interests.
For example, teenagers need to learn math, language, science, ethics, society,
and even sports which have particular elements for them to develop into
well-rounded adults later on.
However,
over 20 ages in the age of over 20, students of University (소문자 시작입니다. 밑에도 마찬가지이고요.) not only choose the subjects they could
enjoy and excel in maximizing their ability but also, they need to exactly know
which subjects could be useful for designing the rest of their life in a long
term perspective way. For instance, All all universities around the world provide
students with an education service in the same way such as dividing into
majored subjects which students could apply for and they can choose for their
specialty. These days, novel types of University have also emerged for career
development based on the knowledge and experiences of each people as every
single person has a different view and idea.
In
conclusion, younger students are not ready to choose the specific subject for
future careers because they are not enough time to experience and learn about
many sectors they might have later on. But (문장을 and but so 로 시작하는 것은 좋지 못합니다.), it is essential for more than
20years that they need to find out the subjects related to something about
their career goals in a fiercely competitive society.
안녕하세요! 오버롤 목표는 7.0 입니다. (라이팅 목표 7.0)
아무래도 제가 리딩이 많이 약해서 스피킹과 라이팅에서 고득점이 나와야 할 것 같습니다.
4월초 시험 예정이며 점수가 안나올 경우 4월 학원을 다니고 5월초 시험을 다시 한번 볼 예정입니다.
많은 조언 부탁드립니다. (시간은 40분 가량 걸렸습니다)
총평: (5/6/7/6) 6.0
일단 6점이긴 한데 이는 글이 오프토픽이라 그런 것이고, 실제 삼쏭님의 영어 실력(문법+어휘)을 고려했을 때 이런 오프토픽 문제만 없으면 라이팅 7.0은 충분히 나오실 겁니다. 지금 문법도 6점이긴 하지만 이는 대소문자 문제 때문에 그렇고, 따로 근본적인 문제는 없었어요.
이 글이 왜 오프토픽인지를 말씀드리자면, 현재 논제에 비추어 봤을 때, '대학생' 은 전제가 된 사항입니다. 그러나 삼쏭님께서는 임의로 나이를 나누셨고요. 대학생이라는 점을 전제한 상황에서 본론1-자기들이 원하는 과목을 배우게 해야 한다, 본론2-필요한 과목만 배우게 해야한다~로 작성해주셨어야합니다.
이처럼 논제에 특정 사항이 전제가 되는 경우가 존재하는데, 이때 그 전제를 마음대로 깨지 않도록 특별히 주의를 기울여주세요~수고하셨습니다 :)