In some places, teenagers
are encouraged to get part-time jobs while they are still in school.
Do the advantages of teenagers working outweigh the
disadvantages?
It is a
common belief that having part-time jobs is good for students while in school.
However, it there (참고로 기존 표현도 틀린 건 아닙니다.) is a more persuasive argument that teenagers should concentrate on
their class. This is because students may not have enough time to study when
they are working on part-time job.
On the one hand, when students are doing their
part-time job, they can learn how to make money. They also can recognize how
making money is difficult in our society. According to recent research, the students
who got had part-time jobs tend to save money compared to those who did not rather than others.
Nevertheless, there are is disadvantages to having
part-time jobs when students study in school. Students should focus on studying
their classes for their future. Teenage The period of teenage is a very important time. For example,
some students who are working for part-time may spend more time to work rather
than studying. This problem can sometimes lead students to fail their important
examination. So (문장을 and but so 로 시작해서는 안 됩니다.) students have to concentrate on studying while in school
because teenagers can have chances to get part-time or full-time jobs after graduating.
To sum up, while
there are some advantages to having part-time jobs while in school, it is evident
that focusing on studying in school outweigh them. (그 장단점에 대해서 요약하는 식으로 분량을 채워주시면 됩니다.)