Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
It has been an issue of debate whether music serves an important role in bringing people together from different cultures and ages. Some people contend music barely affects people in terms of collaboration.However, others argue that music is a good way to bring people together regardless of cultures and ages. I also firmly believe music serves a crucial role in connecting people each other no matter what backgrounds such as cultures and ages they have.
First of all, people can communicate by using music even when they don't know each other's culture. Music arouses common feelings when they listen to the same music. For example, the song 'Imagine' by John Lennon was played at the last stage of the olympics to remind the audience of peace. Slow rhythm and soothing tone is enough to think about peace.
In addition, music can be the bridge to connect between yougn generation and old generation. Young generation likes to listen to hip-hop whose lyrics include the spirit of resistance. On the other hand, old generation likes trot which is similar to counrty style music and its lyrics include the regrets of life. By listening the lyrics of hip-hop and trot, young generation and old generation understand each other.
To sum up, mucis plays an important role in bringing people together since is has the power to arouse the same feeling among people and it can connect young generation and old generation through the lyrics of music each generaion likes.
매번 첨삭 감사드립니다.
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다음에는 첨삭 잘 반영해서 작성하려고 합니다:)
목표는 에세이 +6.5입니다만 ... ㅎㅎ
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