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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them? | |
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These days the pace of life is getting get동사는 쓰지 말아주세요 너무 많은 뜻을 담고 있어서 어휘 부족을 보이는 것입니다 부사로 increasingly 를 써주시거나 becoming을 써주세요 faster and faster > increasingly 를 쓴다면 삭제하셔도 됩니다 . thus>> thus는 문장을 이어주는 기능이 없습니다 so 를 써주세요, people got choose something as simple and convenient as possible than before in order to keep a pace with the changes of society. This preference of people can be applied to our levels of health and fitness through the diet we chosen>>이미 앞에 선택한 것이라고 말했기 때문에 반복하지 않는게 좋습니다. Actually, preparing a healthy meal requires a lot of time as well as fresh ingredients. Thus, busy people in modern hectic world are likely to choose fast foods. Pre-packed foods, however, can contain a number of unhealthy additives and so they are not as nutritious as fresh food. There is a tendency to have stimulating foods including a large amount of salt, sugar and fat which counteract our tension and stress >>긴장과 스트레스에 대항하나요? 비만과 당뇨를 초래한다고 쓰는게 좋을 듯 싶어요. As a result, even though we live in the flood of foods and gain weight, our levels of health and fitness are decreasing.
To solve these problems, regarding obesity and healthy physical imbalance, we should change our chronic habits to having fast foods or retort pouch foods as a main meal. We need to make sure to include a variety of foods from all basic food groups, which is requirement to maintain a correct weight and gives vitamins or minerals that are a significant factors in a healthy diet bodies. That is why to eat fruits and vegetables at least every second other day and check ingredients on food labels.
Moreover, we should try eat moderate portions and do not be tempted to order a large size when eating out. Overeating is the enemy of keeping a correct weight. It needs to be noted that skipping meals can be a cause of overeating, eventually, leading to the destruction of a balanced life.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that the problem about keeping fit is rising, despite of the abundance in various types of foods. To resolve the problems, by checking the ingredients of foods and having regular meals, we change gradually our eating habits.
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