The bar graph shows the growth of the population of urban cities population in different regions from 1950 to 2007, also the projected trends of urbanization the number of people by 2030.
It is clear that the propotion of people residing in urban areas has risen rose, and are is expected to rise by the year 2030. However, some regions are predicted to have lower growth ratio than other continents >>?? some regions 가 어디고 other continents 는 뭔가요? 서론에서 언급이 없었는데 갑자기 이렇게 나오면 그래프를 보지 못하는 제 입장에선 혼란스럽습니다 Task1은 표가 있어도 표를 보지 못하는 사람에게 설명하는 듯 써야 합니다.
In 1950, it is clear that Europe, Latin America, and North America had the higher urbanized population than world’s average>>??, which was 29 percent. However, only Africa and Asia only had a half of the averaged population in the world. In 2007, the percentage of the population in those areas had risen rose close enough to the world’s average population. Countries in the Western hemisphere still far higher than the average number of people. North America was reported to have the most urban people with 79 percent of the total.
By 2030, the overall population are projected to keep growing. The number of people in Europe and America regions are still enomorous, but had the smaller growth rate which is in the range of 6 to 8 percent at about 7 percent, compared to those in Africa and Asia, which are around 13 percent.
2014년을 기준으로 과거는 과거동사
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틀린 곳이 많이 보이구요 have pp 쓰면 과거부터 2014 년 현재까지를 말합니다
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Task Achievement - 6
Coherence and Cohesion - 5
Lexical Resource - 5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 5
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