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It is widely accepted that money is major materials a symbol of success in this world. Some people believe that money is able to do can what people need they are able to do what they need,>> 반면에란 뜻을 가진 while 앞엔 콤마가 붙습니다 while others claim that it is just a measurement to can live in our life. In this essay, I will discuss why I agree with that money is a means to be advantages of money in successful in life.
Firstly, it is the first step of judgement people when you see someone first time. Mostly, people judge that how they wealthy person associated with money>>??. Unfortunately, it is true that money is the fastest substances which is able to see a person>>?? 사람을 볼 수 있는 가장 빠른 물질이다...? . According to a survey conducted by Wedding Magazine, 85% of members in wedding club believe that money is the most important the factor when people judge others.
Secondly, it is unable to live without money in this era. Due to development of society, it has been increased the trend is increasingly common that modern people buy a materials what they want by money. Without this>>??, people recognized that he or she is an unsuccessful person who has not adequate money. Therefore, seriously, people depends on money and believe it is possible to do everything.>> 글이 너무 따로 놉니다 중점 내용이 이리갔다 저리갔다 하네요
To sum up, I agree with the statement that money is can be an essential factor, in this successive life, and I also strongly believe that there are another factors such as personality and luck. It is the important of successful life that not only the money you have is also an invisible factors which it makes who really you are.
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