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The two maps illustrate the changes in an island after the instruction of for tourism industry.
Firstly, First of all, there was built the reception was built in the middle of the island. In the North of the reception new building, the restaurant was also constructed to serve meals to tourist >> 음식을 제공한단 얘기는 언급되지 않아 불필요합니다 in the North of the new building. To the southern end of the island There is a pier in the South of the island. These three facilities -the reception, the restaurant, and the pier- are connected with a newly built vehicle track. To accommodate tourists, a total of 15 huts were built in this island. All the huts are linked with footpaths. Tourist can also use one of these footpaths to access to the beach where people can swim >> 수영에 대한 얘기는 언급되지 않았습니다. This beach , which is located in the western edge of the island.
Overall, the island shifted was altered to a touristic resort with many venues and infrastructures from once nothing in it, except for some tropical trees. There was only a few tropical trees in the island before the construction of tourist facilities. >> 결론은 이 정도면 괜찮다고 생각합니다
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