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Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing with regards to your newspaper advertisement finding volunteers for regional projects.
The issue that increasing amount of increasing litter on the beach offends locals, including me. Litter leaves a bad impression to beach users and tourists, and threatens birds as well as other with wild animals,. Furthermore, it pollutes the marine ecosystem day by day.
I would like to suggest that to have more litter bins are placed more on the beach and selected one day, where locals pick up litter and clean up around the beach with volunteers. I would be glad to help promote those projects and make posters or signboards throughout the local areas.
Moreover, if we want to maintain a keep our clean beach in the future, we need more efforts such as which steadily educating children and locals about the preciousness of taking take care of our local environment. And it is an important fact that we don't stop those projects. It will be much better if schools and public office help also.
I will wait for your response.
Yours faithfully,
Cowon
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