▶ Your Answer : The chart shows information about the figures of water used for each purposes in several regions, which are world, in field of North America, South America, Europe, Africa, Central Asia and South East Asia.
In general, the region Country of the highest use in agriculture was Central Asia. As for Europe, however, they had the lowest use in the same category. catalogue.
Turning to the details, the data revealed that the percentage of Domestic Use in Central Asia and South East Asia was the same by 7 percent, while besides in North America and Europe, the use quantity used was nearly as twice as them which the one in Domestic Use in Central Asia. In addition, unlike their proportion, the percentage of water used in South America for Domestic Use was the highest amount among six regions. countries.
Surprisingly, in all of the regions, countries, the percentage of Agricultural Use was more than 30 percent at least. On the other hand, Central Asia used water for Industrial purpose by only 5 percent. Nevertheless, they reported the highest percentage in six of areas in the world by 88 percent.
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