Your Answer ▼ It is contentious whether being successful
derives from industriousness or wealth. This essay will discuss both
perspectives in detail, and I convince that wealth or appearance more contribute more for to someone to be prestigious and successful in life. On the one hand, working enthusiastically means
that those who have immersed themselves in something could be paid off when
catching a golden opportunity in job markets. Taking a company as an example,
those who analyze, and investigate documents regarding their department are more
likely to be recognized by a supervisor or a CEO. That is because they could expel
productive ideas, distinctive brainstorming and make distinctive brainstorms in comparison with those who do did
not. Secondly, determination is the best motivation for people to have an
ambition. Those who are equipped with intestinal fortitude and firmly decision do not
tend to be stuck at limitation, overcoming a stumbling block to hamper their
decision. That is, these factors can be seen as something stimulating. On the one hand, even if some feel that being
differentiated a standard whether those who are attractive superficially and
rich or not is an unfair, these people are enough to challenge
something innovative and allure worth customers (이 문장은 아마 길어지는 과정에서 꼬인 것 같은데, 댓글 한번 주세요~). In the first place, money is a
huge driving force by investing in
lucrative items in advance. That is why wealthy men’s junior’s business the business of the juniors of wealthy people (이렇게 적는 게 훨씬 문어체에 가깝고, 또한 불필요한 apostrophe 의 사용도 줄일 수 있습니다.) seem to
be settled down as a promising position more than ordinary people. The second
reason is that a benefit of fascinating appearance is being seen online. Online
shopping malls' tip is to employ glamorous people so as to attractive customer’s
attentions. As can be seen frequently, being wealthy and appearance that stands
out should not be ignored anymore. (이미 부와 외모는 이전부터 계속 강조되었던 것이라 should not be ignored 가 적절하다고 보기에는 무리가 있습니다.) To conclude, four factors mentioned above have
respective powers to be regarded as a driving force to be successful. However,
it seems to me that the rich and gorgeous appearance have the upper
hand on being victorious in life.
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