제가 쓴 답은 이렇습니다.
To sum up, there are two arguments and I believe that it is good for people that trying and improving the bad situations.
From time to time, it is the most effective method to adopt an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. This is because that people do not have to spend much time and energy to solve the situations. In fact, most people do not want to be bothered by thingking the new solutions to improve their situations. Moreover, it is not necesary for them to change their environments because it does not have a significant effect on their lives although they do not try to develop the situations.
On the other hand, other people illusatrate that it might be good for them to put effort on the better options. The main reaseon of it is that by trying, their living envrionment can be changed. For example, they are able to spend more time and energy on their families or themselves if they work in the company which is better than the past one. In addition, they can gain confidence as they succeed the try. The majority of peole who make it tend to have the confidence that can allow them to think they will be able to succeed the harder challenges.
To sum up, there are two arguments and I believe that it is good for people that trying and improving the bad situations.
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