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Today, it has been easier for young students to visit foreign countries. In this regard, it is often argued that international exchange visits are not recommended for them. (여건이 되시면, 여기에서 이 입장에 대한 근거를 반 줄 정도로 넣어주시면 괜찮습니다. 본론에서 그걸 하기에는 여유가 없으니까요.) However, the opponents think that it is helpful in their development, and I also agree with them. In this essay, I will discuss the reasons.
Actually, it is important to expose young people to different environments because they can learn something good quickly there. Some people go to middle school and high school in two different countries, and within about 6 years they can learn two different languages and cultures. These language skills and their understanding of the cultures will help them when they get the best job when they grow up. (dhll님 실력이면 두 when 중 하나는 다른 걸로 대체해주실 수 있을 겁니다.)
Also, children can become more independent when they live on their own in a new environment. Not everyone can have the opportunity to control their own life at such a young age, but living in a new country enables them to do so. They will be able not just to choose a country that they want to stay but also to manage their school life without an additional aid from of parents.
In conclusion, I personally believe that international exchange visits are encouraging for teenage students. This is because it makes them grow independent with more abilities. (본론의 순서대로 언급해주시는 게 좋습니다. 즉, 둘을 바꿔주셔야 하는 것이죠. 대신 그 경우에는 Makes them에서의 탈피가 필요하겠고요.) |