<Topic> In spite of advances made in agriculture, many
people around the world still go hungry. Why is
this case? What can
be done about this problem? |
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Even though agricultural technologies are being improved nowadays, the growing number of people with starvation is one of the great concerns in the world. In this essay, the source of the difficulties and some measures will be discussed.
It is
a well-known fact that nations which have many people in hunger, usually do not
have appropriate policies and social system such as a transportation system. If
a country does not have highway or paved roads to convey crops, it might be
difficult to share it due to the lack of connection between regions. What is
more, the drastically growing population also can be a reason. While the population of African nations
and other Third countries
Some
people opine that the national poverty is getting deteriorated, however, a lot
of people try to help because they believe these issues are able to be resolved.
Then, how we can enrich these countries? (의문문의 경우 앞에서 연설하실 때에 한해서 사용해주시면 됩니다.) First, donations made
To condense, regarding starvation problems, we can rescue vulnerable communities by the donation in the short term. In the long term, by enhancing social systems and implementing obligated education, the rate of poverty in the world can decline. |
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