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These three graphs indicated how schools spent their budgets(teachers' salaries, other workers' salaries, furniture and equipment, resources, and insurance) in 1981, 1991, >> 세개 이상 나열에서 마지막 and 앞은 콤마입니다 and 2001. Each chart is divided into five segments; teachers' salaries, other workers' salaries, furniture and equipment, resources, and insurance.
On the first diagram chart of in 1981, to describe spending of 1981, teachers' salaries are occupied with 40 percent which is the highest section. Other workers' salaries are reported to 28 percent as the second rank. For both furniture and equipment and resources, each 15 percent of the annual expenses was used for each. Insurance part was recorded to the smallest one,>> 콤마 빼주세요 with 2 percent.
In 1991, teachers' salaries reached its peaked at 50 percent and resources' spending on resources also rose to 20 percent. On the contrary, other workers' salaries decreased to 22 percent which was ranked as the third one as well as furniture and equipments's costs was less than 5 percent of the total budget.>> furniture and equipment의 비용이 총 예산의 5퍼센트 미만일 뿐 아니라 다른 근로자들의 급여는 3위인 22퍼센트까지 떨어졌다 여기선 furniture and equipment도 떨어졌다는 것을 보여줘야 두 문장 간에 상호성이 있을 듯 합니다
In 2001, teachers' salaries slightly reduced slightly>> 부사는 동사 뒤에서 구밉니다 with 45 percent, but still were indicated as the largest expenses. Other worker's salaries steadily decreased steadily to 15 percent. The biggest change was furniture and equipment which extremely reached soared to 23 percent. Insurance was reported at 8 % which was still the smallest one.
To conclude, the largest spending is teachers' salaries despite of the slight fluctuations. Other workers' salaries continued decreasing from 1981 to 2001, but Insurance steadily increased steadily.
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