▶ Your Answer : The chart compares different kinds of fuel consumption in the United States over the period of 50 years over five decades from when to when 의 형태가 더 좋겠네요.
It is clear that the USA saw and predicts>> the USA가 보나요? 보여지는것이 맞습니다 that the amounts of most fuels consumed increases throughout the period>>?? , except natural gas and hydropower. It is also noticeable that Americans people use the largest amount of petrol and oil between 1980 and 2030.
In 1980, 35 quadrillion petrol and oil were consumed, which were the highest figure over other five resources. By contrast, people in the USA used between 15 and 20 quadrillion units of coal and natural gas, and . However, those of only under 5 quadrillion of nuclear, solar/wind, and hydropower were used in 1980. From 1980 to 2010, the consumption of petrol and oil rose by>> just under 가 나온 것을 보면 10 바로 아래까지 증가했다는 것에 문맥 상 더 가까운 말 같은데 그럼 전치사는 to가 와야 합니다 by는 얼마만큼 증가했다는 뜻입니다 just under 10 quadrillion, and the amounts of use of coal and natural gas used increased slightly with fluctuations from around 16 to just above 20 quadrillion units.
By 2030, the use of petrol and oil will be expected to increase to around 45 quadrillion units,>> 콤마 빼주세요 and the level of consumption of coal will also rise gradually to approximately 28 quadrillion units. In contrast, it is expected that the amounts of nuclear, solar/wind, and hydropower used by Americans inhabitants will remain stable at around 5 quadrillion units.
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