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Genetic engineering is researched for utilizing in medical field. Nowadays, some governments boost genetic engineering. On the other hands However, governments ban studying genetic engineering it. In my opinion, governments should encourage the genetics engineering which are to be discussed in this short written presentation.
To start with the treatment of disease. In genetic engineer study for human body particularly inheritance>> 동사는 어딨나요? and >>주어는 어딨나요? find the treatment of diseases which related in genetics. >> 문장 첫 줄에 주장이 없네요 For example, if you get are colorblindness which can’t cannot compare with the specific color from the parents. >>?? 무슨 말인가요 또한 if 절은 있는데 주절은 어딨나요? We have the treatment for colorblindness. However, although the optical disease is uncurable now, genetic engineering can find the solution. As a result, genetic engineering affects to treat genetic disorder.
Moreover, genetic engineering makes people's live longer. Ways of lifespan is in the genes>>??. Scientists believe that genes have answers of lifespan. For example, some scientists research in DNA. In DNA, there are a lot of information about human body. Thus, Genetic engineering can find the answers of lifespan.>> 너무 허술한 본론입니다
Meanwhie, genetic enginnering can make genetic mutation. It can be a disaster. For example, chromosomal mutation can be appeared because, in genetic enginnering, they alter the some locations of the genes. It can make people bisexual. Therefore, genetic engineering can make disaster in the human life.
To sum up, genetic engineering is on a downwards trend such as chromosomal mutation; however, it has more benefits in society. Thus, the government should support genetic engineering to improve in a medical field.
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