▶ Your Answer : The three pictures >> charts 보통 picture는 좀 안 쓰는 경향이 있습니다 뒷부분에서 picture라고 언급해주시고 문장 첫 시작에선 pictures보단 다른 것으로 표현하는 것이 좋습니다 illustrates the geological features of Kelsey in 1780, 1960, and 2000. Natural areas such as river, woods, and wetland, as well as artificial structures like such as 가 더 좋은 표현입니다 road, bridge, farms, villages, sports field, schools, >> 세개 이상 나열 중 마지막 and 앞엔 콤마입니다 and shops are shown on the pictures as simple symbols.
According to the map of 1780, the city had the river flowing from the North to the South in the Western area. And, >> and or but also so 는 문두에 쓰지 않습니다 there were four farms in the central zone, and 100 homes and large woods in the Eastern area.
After 80 years, the bridge across the river was constructed and the number of farms was decreased to two. The area of woods was also shrinked to one third, >> 반면에 라는 뜻을 가진 while 앞엔 콤마가 붙습니다 while the number of houses was doubled at the same period. From the residential area to the river, a straight road was built to connect them.
In the year of 2000, new infrastructure like such as schools and sports field were built in the Southern area replacing the woods,>> 콤마 빼주세요 and,>> 콤마 빼주세요 wetland for birds was also emerged in the East-Southern area. Five shops started their business at the end of the river, and a new road from homes to schools was built. The quantity of houses increased up to 500.
Overall, the village went through urbanization during the period. and Therefore, its intensity was stronger in the later period than the former period.>> the later 는 뭐고 the former는 뭐죠? 연도의 범위가 세개입니다
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