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Today, there are many kinks kinds of
environmental problems around the world. While some people think the extinct or
loss of species of plants and animals is the most serious problem in this issue,
others say that detrimental pollutants such as emissions and fine dirt that
effect on human beings are the main problem.
The formal (혹시 former 를 의도하셨나요?) who say the main environmental
issue in our planet is the loss of particular animals or plants think the
extinct of species lead to human’s extinct. Humans are taking advantage of
almost everything around them us, even insects. People raise animals and plants not
only for eating but also relaxation. It means, were it not for animals and
plants, people have loss of something to eat and something would lose things to eat and things to to make their mind
peaceful. In this reason, preserving endangered animals and plants is the most valuable
for our planet.
On the other hands, the latter think believe that pollutants made by humans are the most harmful to the environment. Human beings have
been developing technology and science to improve the general quality of life so that the quality of our life has been
improved . However, in this as a result, people earned fine dirt and car emission
which have bad effects on human’s health. For instance, most people drive a car
when they go to school or work, even though the distance of destination spot is
close. Although people know that it emits pollution, they choose convenient. (현상 자체보다는 결과에 초점을 맞춰 작성해주세요~이 글의 핵심은 '왜' 각각의 문제가 현시대의 가장 큰 환경 문제인지를 밝히는 것입니다.)
I think it (문단에 처음 등장하는 대상이 대명사로 쓰이지 않도록 해주세요~) (+개인적으로는 chicken and egg question 과 같은 비유적인 표현은 공식적인 에세이에서 쓰지 않는 걸 추천드리지만, 이건 언제까지나 권장이고, 필수는 아닙니다.) is a chicken and egg
question. Every environmental problem should be considered when talking about
this issue because humans rather than other factors ruin our environment most and
get damaged back from environmental problems. |