Your Answer ▼ Undoubtedly, several countries have difficulties about healthy problems related to overeating fast food. Accordingly, there are some people saying that the state should impose higher tax for those who eat (일단 문법만 바꿔드리면 이렇게 되는데, 인스턴트 음식을 먹는 사람들에게 세금을 부과하는 것과, 인스턴트 음식에 세금을 부과하는 것은 약간 다르고, 논제에 따르면 후자 쪽으로 작성해주셔야 합니다.) fast food. And (문장을 and but so 로 시작하는 것은 가급적이면 피해주세요.)I totally agree with this view for the following the reasons. The main Main reason that supports my view is that the state will require more medical service and facilities if the increase in health problems continues to be an issue (이런 식으로, 핵심에 대한 꾸준한 상기를 해주시는 게 좋습니다.). This is because eating fast food is responsible for not only individuals but also the state. To exemplify this, as As obesity has become national concerns, the government goverments started to prevent health problems preventing from obesity including health problems through policies. Obesity is closely related to food, and this need national funds since they get worse physically and they have to go to the hospital. Therefore, people who eat unhealthy food should give the state tax to prepare their future. (여기도 서론과 마찬가지입니다.)
Another reason is that most people who eat junk food find it harder to do not control themselves because these foods appeal convenience they appealed convinence, speed and taste. To be precise, when we go out, we can easily find various shops which sell junk food. The food is made very quickly and delicious. Moreover, in modern society, they significantly siginificantly consider time to enjoy their life and to work. As a result, unless an higher tax is put on junk food, modern people would not be willing to give them up (패러프레이징하는 건 좋은데, 그 과정에서 의미가 달라지지 않도록 주의해주셔야 합니다. 저는 맹님을 도와드리려고 있는 사람이니까 저 프로그램이 뭔지 고민하고 여러 번 읽어본 뒤에 수정해드렸지만, 채점관은 객관적으로 한 번 읽었을 때 이해를 하지 못하면 칼같이 감점하고 넘어가기 때문이죠.) if there are not compulsory programmes, they are not willing to give up junk food.
To conclude, from above reasons, I can assume that it is necessary for junk foods to be imposed with higher tax purchaser to imposing higher tax due to the fact that junk foods increase the requirement of the medical system and the lack of control for individuals.
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