■ DirectionYou have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.■ QuestionSummarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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INTERNATIONAL ENGLISH LANGUAGE TESTING SYSTEM WRITING ANSWER BOOKLET Candidate Name:텍스트 | Candidate Number:텍스트 | Centre Number:텍스트1 | Date:텍스트1 |
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Topic ▼ Some people believe that arts do not improve people's lives. Therefore, government should not spend money on it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? |
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Your Answer ▼
It
is sometimes argued that the government should not expend its tax money in arts
because it is not helpful to improve people’s lives. However, I strongly
believe that government’s role is important in promoting the arts as they have
positive impacts on one’s life in various ways. (이렇게 작성할 경우 논점이 '예술 그 자체의 중요성' 이 아닌, '예술 promote 에 있어 누구의 역할의 중요한지' 로 바뀝니다. 전자 쪽에 맞춰지도록 수정해주세요~혹시 어떻게 바꿔야할지에 대해 모르시겠다면 댓글 주세요!)
To
begin with, it is a common belief that the government’s expenditure in arts is
not effective due to its characteristics, having relatively low relationship
with people’s basic necessity. That is to say, spending on meeting people’s
basic needs such as education and health should be prioritized, considering the
budget limitation. In fact, expenditures in basic health and education take the
biggest share in the government’s budget plan in many countries. Even though it
seems reasonable explanation, it is flawed. (여기를 대신해서 정부가 예술에 투자해야 하는 이유를 하나 더 넣어주시면 됩니다. 자세한 건 총평의 링크를 참고해주세요~)
I
am of the opinion that the arts can improve quality of lives significantly, and
the government should pay attention to the art promotion. It is mainly because
arts can influence one’s emotion in a positive way. According to a recent
research, people tend to easily relieve their stress while appreciating art
works such as music. (지금과 같이 연구를 넣으면, 기호화했을 때 'A이다. 왜냐하면 연구에서 A라고 했기 때문이다.' 와 같은 전개가 됩니다. 즉, 전개가 전혀 되지 않는 것이죠. '왜' 저 연구가 A라는 사실을 보여줬는지 등의 정보를 넣어주셔야 해요.) This shows the evidence how arts affect people’s lives
directly. In addition, arts also can influence people indirectly, by contributing
to the growth of tourism and culture industry. For example, as the K-pop music
became popular worldwide, the export in that field rose rapidly recently. This
can lead to an increase in tax revenues and more expenditures in meeting basic
needs of people.
In brief, the government should increase its
investment in arts, in order to assist people from the perspective of psychology
and economy. |
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EXAMINER’S USE ONLY | Total Score: 6.5/9 | Examiner: | | TR (Task Response) | CC (Coherence and Cohesion) | LR (Lexical Resource) | GRA (Grammatical Range and Accuracy) | Score | 6/9 | 5/9 | 7/9 | 7/9 |
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안녕하세요? 6.5를 목표로 하고 있고 11월 말에 시험 볼 예정입니다. 40분 내에 쓴 에세이인데 시간이 부족해서 결론이 짧네요..
안녕하세요 :) 저는 우리 수험생분들 다 기억하고 있으니, 정보는 한 번 이후에는 안 적어주셔도 됩니다!