Due to the development of the traffic system, people's mobility these days is increasing and getting easier and faster. This phenomenon brings occurs more drivers on the road and the significantly expanding number of cars on our road cause traffic congestions. That is why we should find a way to lessen the number of cars and give appropriate alternatives for drivers.
To begin with, there are several ways to decrease the number of automobiles and among them, limiting the use of the cars according to the days and the assigned number of the car will be a good solution. In some countries, they are already making this kind of policy to lessen the movement of automobiles. Limiting car usage according to the days and numbers on the license plate is to set a specific number for each day and the car driver who has a car number that ends with the set number for the day cannot drive on that day. Then, the cars on the road will be decreased than before and people will use other types of transportation to move on the assigned date.
Moreover, rather than just limiting the usage of the car, giving another option for car drivers is more important and effective. Even traffic is getting worse, thus almost everyone needs transportation to move anyway. Therefore, offering better service with public transportation will be a good substitute for car drivers these days. Setting a cheaper fee for public transportation and providing money for public transportation from one's workplace according to his/her output will be a good example of better service. Furthermore, increasing the number of stations and mass transit can work enough instead of the personal automobile.
Managing the number of cars based on the policy and providing public transportation with a better service will be a great response to the worsening traffic of nowadays. Changing and solve this traffic problem can not be completed in a single day, but if there are active participation and alertness on traffic jam by drivers, there will be no trouble with congestion on the road.
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