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It is the fact that the crime rates in the whole
world are going up and simultaneously the criminals' average ages are going
down(문제와 무관련한 내용인 것 같아 삭제해도 될 것 같습니다.). On the other hand, the police powers are losing become weak for many reasons. In these circumstances, some people insist
that to prevent rising crime rates, the police should be given more power. In this
essay, I will explain why I agree with this opinion.
The police are the only (단정적인 서술은 권장하고 싶지 않습니다. 예컨대 사법부도 법을 통해 범죄로 부터 시민들을 보호하고 있지 않나요?)organization in the
government that can help and protect the citizens from crime. If citizens are
threatened by criminals, they have no choice but to rely on the police.
However, when arresting criminals, today's police forces are limited by many
useless rules and media's critic(이것에 대한 보충 설명이 한 문장 정도는 더 나와줘야 합니다.). As a result, clever criminals use these
loopholes to commit crimes and are then released. In the end, more and more bad
people will laugh at the police force and it will certainly lead to citizen's
terror and the government will lose their trust from the public. South Korea is
currently the most accurate country for the example above. About 25 years ago,
the president ordered police to eliminate the political opposition and now,
many people still remember the corruption of the police back then and if the police
try to do their duty in a little rough way, they press the government with
great accusations. Eventually, the
government has weakened the nation's only security organization by creating
various and useless regulations to avoid angry voices from the public. As a
result, the police have become the most pathetic department in Korea, and even
juvenile offenders ignore and look down on them.(서술의 초점은 '공권력이 약화된 배경이나 현실'이 아닌 '공권력을 강화하는게 범죄율을 낮추는 데 어떻게 효과적인지' 가 되어야 합니다.)
I
firmly insist that there is no vigilante like Batman in reality and the police
force is the only power that can protect citizens from criminals. Therefore, to
decrease crime rates, police should get more power. |