people should only concentrate on a single skill for the life because it is the best way
to succeed.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
It is debatable that whether people should only concentrate on a one single skill for the life since some people tend to believe it is the best way to succeed. However, I strongly disagree with this statement.
What people need is a profound knowledge on every aspect. Life does not provide us people all the guidelines of every circumstances that they (인칭 통일의 측면에서 수정해드렸습니다.) people might face. Knowledge comes handy when people confront with situations or troubles what they did not expect. Looking at the well-known people who tend to get an evaluation of being a successful person, it is common that although people who gained fame had strong knowledges on what they focused on, they never neglected other abilities, but to enhanced them altogether. Steve Jobs for example, he was a successful IT inventor but also a very good lecturer, and an excellent entrepreneur. He combined the technology and humanities inside what he created, an iphone iPhone (기존처럼 쓴다고 점수가 까이는 건 아니지만, 그래도 이왕이면 정확하게 쓰는 게 좋으니까 수정해드렸습니다.), which became a huge profit toward apple. This tells that person who learns how to control and make use of other subjects all at once, that is when their output gets to prosper.
Furthermore, concentrating on one skill can make that person hard to reach his (아무 이유 없이 특정 성별 쪽으로만 쏠려서는 안 됩니다.) goal. While focusing really hard on one subject to obtain what that person wishs wishes for, there are lots of things that person needs while doing so. For example, getting a PH.D. degree requires lot of things. The final objective might look like it only needs to write good quality of papers but while writing papers it needs to have much more skills and abilities in many ways. (여기서 끊으시면 마치 볼일 보다가 중간에 뒷처리를 안 하고 나온 상황이랑 같게 보시면 됩니다. 빨간 부분에 대해 더 설명해주세요~)
Focusing a lot of things at once is hard, but eventually they tend to pay off, because concentrating one skill is not how the world works. In my opinion, a truly successful true succeeded person would have an admittable place on its job, and who has a warm-hearted family, and with good relationship with others, which cannot be obtained by focusing one specific skill.
선생님! 질문이 있습니다. 제가 알기로는 ielts 시험순서가 상황에 다르다고 들었는데 순서가 어떻게 되는지 알수 있을까요?
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말이 많아서 헷갈리네요ㅜㅜ 2020년부터 바뀌었다고 하던데 시험 순서도 중요하니 첨삭과 함께 알려주시면 정말 감사하겠습니다!!ㅠ
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