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It is a common belief that childhood eating habits should be learned at home. However, I firmly believe that we should teach our children should be taught (이런 식으로 수정해서 불필요한 1인칭 사용을 없앨 수 있습니다.) balanced eating habits in primary schools. This is because children could inherit unhealthy eating habits from their parents, which makes them causes childhood obesity. In this essay, I will explain my opinion and give some supporting examples. (참고로 서론 초반부는 수정이 필요한데, 총평에서 말씀드리겠습니다. 현재 서론 초반부 때문에 생각보다 글이 많이 망가지고 있어요.) To begin with, growing up children are always exposed to junk food. We can easily see a variety of colourful candies, chocolates, and cookies on the shelves to be displayed to suit the children's sight. In fact, parents cannot protect their children from all these temptations. Meanwhile, if children can distinguish between healthy and unhealthy foods through education, it will make them choose better foods. On top of that, it is not easy to change the wrong eating habits after becoming an adult. Although most people know that coke contains a lot of sugar that could be harmful to their health, they cannot stop drinking it. The reason is because Because they have been tamed by that addictive taste from their childhood. On the other hand, people who have been exposed to nutritious healthy foods since childhood tend to avoid junk food than others. To sum up, learning about eating habits from only home is not enough to protect children’s healthy life. (여기도 서론과 마찬가지의 맥락에서의 수정이 필요한데, 자세한 건 총평을 확인해주세요.) While childhood obesity is a serious problem, it can be solved by nutrition education. For these reasons, I think that nutrition education at primary school is necessary for our a healthy life.
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