Your Answer ▼Nowadays, live expectancy has increased all around the world, because more and more people take care of themselves and due to the technological development. To resolve this phenomenon ‘s drawbacks, the government should play an important role in society. These days, increasing of live expectancy is contentious among many experts, who they have significantly pointed out that new rules should be made make by the government. This is because due to the expending extension of life expectancy, many young people get burden that they should impose many taxes from their salary to support older people, since retirement time did not change compared to the past, it is still around 60 years old. (문장이 너무 길어지면서 비문이 되었습니다. 중간에 한 번은 끊고, 다듬어보세요! 어떻게 바꿔야할지 모르신다면 언제든 댓글 주시면 됩니다.) To confront this problem, the government should make a new law that to extend the retirement age to 70 years old is expending retirement time such as around 70 years old. Therefore, this policy can reduce the burden of young people and increase old people’ life happiness. Many people can feel a sense achievement when they get a success in workplace. One the other hand, individuals should find another skills to survive expending life to solve this problem. Since life expectancy has increased, people could live two different lives. For example, many sport athletes find another life when they are retirement because sports athletes have short working time compared to other people. Many famous athletes work as actors after finishing their first job. It is clear that general people can also find and learn another skills that they are good at or interested in to make life more efficiently. (여기에 대해서는 총평에서 말씀드리겠습니다.)
To sum up, firstly the role of government is very crucial in society, also the individual have to improve their awareness to find a wise ability to live happier life. (결론도 다시 작성해주셔야 하는데, 총평을 참고해주세요.) |