Your Answer ▼Nowadays, it is common belief that the Internet is an essential part of humans life. A lot of people try to find information and hangout with other Internet users. Regarding this, many people believe that the Internet provides an perfect means of communication for our society. However, other people worry about that the Internet may suggest wrong information for us. There are many opinions about the topic but I firmly believe that the Internet is one of the greatest benefit of given for humanity. (서론은 현재에서 조금만 더 간추려주시고 본론 쪽에 그 분량을 투자해주세요~) Unfortunately, it is an undeniable truth true that the Internet have some of negative effects. At first, sometimes the Internet could provide wrong information for citizens. Therefore, internet (여기도 대문자 시작해주시면 됩니다.) users always have to be careful about given information by the Internet. In addition, too much using the Internet cause the Internet addiction spending too much time online can cause addiction (인터넷 그 자체를 완벽하게 대체할 수 있는 동의어는 없습니다. 그러나 이와 같이 수정함으로써, 인터넷이 두 번 쓰이는 것을 막았죠.). Internet addiction makes individuals internet-dependly and unsocializationly. Therefore, it should avoid that using the Internet for a too long time. (인터넷 사용을 줄여하는지의 여부는 논제에서 관심의 대상이 아닙니다. '중독의 위험이 있기 때문에' 인터넷이 정보를 찾는 소스로써 좋지 못하다 정도로 적어주셔야해요.) Although the Internet have some of drawbacks, it is clearly true that it the Internet bring a huge amount of benefits. The internet allows the most convenient and efficient convenience and efficience communication between people. For example, nowadays, everyone all people can hangout with others any time even if people with those who live in another country. Also, the Internet provides the uncountable amount of information for everyone equally. it It would be one of the solution to resolve many social problems. In conclusion, it is obvious that internet may bring some of disadvantages for humanity. Nevertheless, the essay argues that the benefits of the Internet are much outweigh drawbacks with some of reasons. (그 이유에 대해 짧게나마 요약해주셔야해요.) |