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It is a common belief that students are encouraged to get part-time jobs while they are still in school. However, there is a more persuasive argument that part-time jobs will interrupt students studying. On the one hand, getting part-time jobs can teach students (학교에서 배울 수 없는 '무엇' 을 가르칠 수 있는지를 넣어주셔야합니다. 명사 하나가 들어가면 돼요.) which they can not learn in school. By working they can learn how to take care of their money or work with other people. For instance, teenagers who use their pocket money and who use their own money has have a lot of differences., Teenagers To be specific, the former working at part-time jobs experience how hard it is to earn money, thus they amake smart consumptions do smart consuming. Also they work with people who they do not know, so from this they can improve sociality get better. Nevertheless, getting part-time jobs while students are still in on school is a bad idea. Students work is studying not working, part-time jobs interrupt studying The main duty of students is to study, not work, and part time jobs interrupt them from this duty. Students’ education time disappears because of the part-time job’s hardship. Survey of the high school students revealed that (여기에 주체가 들어가야 합니다.) working at part-time jobs slept in classes more than other students. Also recent studies have shown that 60% of the students who work at part-time jobs grade was lower than the average. (저는 통계, 설문 등의 사용에 대해서는 정말 추천드리지 않지만, 굳이 쓰시겠다면 한 개 정도로만 유지해주세요~) From these example, it is clear that working while they are in school is harmful. To sum up, while there are some advantages getting part-time jobs, it is evident that the disadvantages outweigh them. (그 이유에 대한 요약이 필요합니다.) |