Some people believe that genetically modified crops can solve food shortages and should be encouraged. Others think that genetically modified crops can cause environmental problems and require further research. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. |
There is a debate about using of genetically modified crops. Some people are on the opinion that those crops can solve the food shortages and should be recommended, however, others think that those crops have a possibility of causing environmental issues and should be investigated closely. Even though there are some critics, I firmly believe that growing and cultivating the crops will be helpful.
People have insisted that the modified crops are able to solve the shortage of agricultural products. This is because the crops are developed to stand poor weather and surroundings so that people can cultivate lots of products and provide them to others who need food for a living. For example, in some developing countries, farmers who have been given the seed of modified crops are trying to grow various types of modified crops and a lot of products from these crops are sold in the market in cheaper prices. As a result, citizens could buy the products in reasonable prices and the food shortage is being solved every year.
On the other hand, some people are against the eating and growing the modified crops because of an environmental problem. Since , since (기존의 두 번째 문장은 비문입니다.) cultivating this type of crops can cause the dropping of the soil quality. Recent research has shown that by growing genetically modified crops, the nutritions which are needed for maintaining the soil's quality would be destroyed and missing are destroyed and missing. As a result, people cannot grow any plants, even the modified crops.
In conclusion, there are two views that discuss the genetically modified crops but I think that those crops are helpful because they allow us to solve the food shortage. (여기는 총평에서 말씀드리겠습니다.)
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