■ Direction· Task 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words.
· Task 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
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INTERNATIONAL ENGLISH LANGUAGE TESTING SYSTEM WRITING ANSWER BOOKLET Candidate Name:텍스트 | Candidate Number:텍스트 | Centre Number:텍스트1 | Date:텍스트1 |
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Topic ▼ Many countries are experiencing an increase in numbers of teenage crimes. What do you think is causing this problem? What measures could be taken to reduce them? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words. |
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Your Answer ▼
It is commonly acknowledged that juvenile
crimes are rising as a social problem in many countries. Since the trending is considered as one of the crucial social issues, the government has tried hard
to reduce it. This essay will discuss the reason why the number of juvenile
crimes is increasing and the measures to solve this problem with few examples.
I think there are two main reasons which
cause the increasing number of juvenile crimes. The one is related to the transformation
of family forms. As society is changing, more and more people deem that the
conventional family unit is uncomfortable. Therefore, forms of family are
smaller, which can directly affect adults’ attentions toward their children are
declining. Another reason is that the easier approach toward media induced
students copycat crimes. For example, when we are reminiscing childhood, some
of our classmates who smoke or commit a crime used to watch aggressive TV shows
and follow characters’ clothing, attitude, and everything.
Given that reasons, children are easily
likely to be influenced by surrounding environment like parents’ attention and
media. Therefore, to reduce the number of young offenders, the awareness of
importance of education, especially from household, must be raised so that parents
can give their children good support and good care. Moreover, media coverage via
TV shows, movies should try to reduce offensive contents. Last but not least, launching
some campaigns via diverse media may be helpful to prevent crimes to some extent.
Overall, I assert that government’s
educational welfare expenditures expansion and the reducing offensive media
contents can help to reduce juvenile crimes. |
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EXAMINER’S USE ONLY | Total Score: /9 | Examiner: | | TR (Task Response) | CC (Coherence and Cohesion) | LR (Lexical Resource) | GRA (Grammatical Range and Accuracy) | Score | /9 | /9 | /9 | /9 |
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