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When it comes to sending text message, there is a growing debate
about that sending a message has advantages and disadvantages. (서론에서 논제를 정확히 반영해주셔야 합니다. 현재 논제는 단순히 문자메세지 자체만 다루고 있는 것이 아니라, 전화 통화와 비교해서 사람들이 문자를 더 많이 사용한다는 현상에 대해 얘기하고 있어요. 이를 임의로 줄여서 작성해서는 안 됩니다.)
Everything has pros and cons so using a message has also pros.
First, it is difficult to talk detail contents and expression. When people are
calling each other, they can feel and recognize tons of things from the voice,
such as feeling of the person who talk with. That is why many people use
calling and try to listen others voice directly when they have to talk about serious
and important issues. In addition, a lot of people who think that trust is very
significant tend to use calling than texts. Although there are same with
contents when they send text messages and call using a phone, people are easy
to believe the contents when they are calling and listening directly.
However, there are also good things when people use text messages, compared to than calling. Especially, young people are prone to use message applications through
a smartphone. This is becauseBecause texting is faster than calling when it comes to delivering to deliver what they want to say. That is the recent trend that most
young people are used to short words than full sentences. Additionally, people
say that there is emotional expression different with calling with voice. When
people send text messages, they are able to use emotion icons, called “Emoji”,
and words that they use only in texts. There These are tools to express their feelings, which are
different with calling. Finally, most workers are very busy to live in modern
society. It means there are not a lot of time to take a phone. That is when
people usually send a message to others. Lately, this is just one of attitudes
to workers who do not want to disrupt their jobs. (지워진 본론 첫 번째 문단과 이 부분에 관해서는 총평에서 말씀드리겠습니다.)
In conclusion,
sending text messages has various pros that people can send contents quickly
and express felling ad their own way. But there are also many cons that people
are hard to deliver serious talking and give the trust. (여기도 총평에서 말씀드리겠지만, 수정이 필요합니다. 논제의 현상에 대한 이유-그리고 장단점 중 무엇이 많은지에 대한 나의 생각을 요약해주시면 돼요.)
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