<Topic> The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Leisure time in a typical week in hour - by sex and employment status, 1998-99.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
You should write at least 150 words.
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The given bar graph illustrates the result of a survey regarding how much time the male and females groups in the five different employment types spent for the activities in a usual week in 1998-1999.
By and large, It it generally can be seen that unemployed people are likely to show the highest number of leisure hours compared to other types of job status and also, notably, men who are employed as part-timers and housewives did not work out (제가 해드린 것처럼, 띄어주셔야 합니다. 붙이는 거랑은 달라요.) at all.
In regards to the unemployed and retired group, the figures are overwhelmingly greater; almost twofold bigger than that of full-time employees, moreover, these three sorts of male group members tended to spend approximately 5 more hours more than the average time spending of the female group members.
It is noteworthy that no data is given for the male chart in part-time employed and housewives, however, female housewives enjoyed activities 50 hours of activities in a week and the graph slightly followed by the result of part-time employed women. In the supplied both gender figures, the lowest number of exercise hours is shown at the full-time employed graph since they committed leisure only approximately 40 hours per week to leisure.
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총평: 자잘한 오류들이 있었고, 이 외에도 제가 msg를 쳐드린 부분들은 있었지만, 그래도 이정도면 task 1임을 감안했을 때 잘 써주신 편입니다. 패러프레이징 등도 깔끔하게 되었고요.
work out 과 workout 은 확실하게 구분해주세요!
수고하셨습니다 :)
감사합니다.