Q) Most of the world’s poor live in countries where tourism is a growth industry. The issue is that tourism does not benefit the poor. How can the income generated by tourism benefit the poor? And how can we ensure that tourism does not destroy traditional culture and ways of life? - You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. |
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There are a lot of countries which attract countless tourists in the world. Tourism is one of the noticeable industries due to its remarkable profits but it could be argued that some countries show poor share of (이렇게 바꾸는 게 문어에 훨씬 가깝습니다.) profit First of all, one reason for the low rate in beneficial sharing is However, despite the high revenue from global tourists, the destruction of the national heritage and local residents’ daily lives by travelers is becoming a great concern. In many Many villages in European countries such as Venice, local people committed a huge strike to condemn the tourists who entered residences without authorizations, threw rubbish in the river and scribbled on the wall. One way to resolve the drawbacks is, putting severe penalties to suspects like imposing fine or holding a person in custody. Another solution is developing conventional activities for tourists, for instance, cooking local dishes and experiencing traditional costumes. These programs may appeal to visitors by introducing unique attractions. In conclusion, by offering education opportunities and social care services, poor people can be helped. (income generated by tourism 쪽도 포함되어야 합니다.) In addition, by setting up strict guidelines and creating exceptional tourist programs, we can pursue the sustainability of the national environment.
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