Your Answer ▼ A generation ago, people couldn’t could not(축약어는 풀어서 써주세요) expect to live longer due to wars or diseases. However, in many parts of the world, people’s life spans are getting longer nowadays. This situation would lead us to huge changes in our lifestyles, and there would be positive effects and negative effects on individuals and society. In this essay, I will look at both sides (발문을 다시 보시면 possible effects of longer living 이 무엇인가에 대해서 묻고 있습니다. 저라면 본론 두 문단을 '개인' 관점과 '사회'관점에서 본 고령화사회의 장점을 중심으로 구성할 것 같습니다.)and propose my opinion. There are several benefits of living longer. First of all, we have more time and another chances to do whatever we want. For example, there are plenty of artists who started their career after retirement from their work for the cost of living. Rose Wylie, one of the most famous artists in the UK also started to study in university again and started her career as an artist after her children were grown up. That is to say, thanks to longer life span, we could say we have more chances to do other work. Another advantage is that society would have more experts with plenty of experiences in various areas. We can expect seniors could work longer in a range of realms, which means that society have has good advisers for new issues. They could give us appropriate advice with plenty of experiences accumulated for several decades. On the other hand, there are some disadvantages. If people are living longer and retire from work late, younger people may have less chances to have jobs due to lack of job vacancy. Even though there is a chance to apply for a job, it would be difficult for young people to compete with skillful elderlies. This would be serious problems because young people have to earn money for the cost of living, paying taxes and for raising their kids. Another problem is that governments should expense a lot of money for pension and health insurance to support elder people. (therefore 앞뒤문장이 '그러므로'의 의미로 연결되고 있나요?) Therefore, government should do more in order that young people can have enough chance to find jobs. To sum up, living longer is everyone’s desire. However, there are both positive and negative aspects. To tackle the drawbacks, both individuals and society should prepare this long-life span era so that our dream—living longer could be God’s bless. |