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The given pie chart illustrates the answers of a question that which type of tourist attractions is more preferred by visitors in Britain among Theme Parks, Museums & Galleries, Historic Houses & Monuments and Wild life Park & Zoo. And In addition, the given chart gives information about where people visit in Theme Parks among Blackpool Pleasure Beach, Alton Tower, Pleasureland Southport, Chessington World of Adventures and Legoland Windsor. Overall, the most people prefer to visit Theme Parks. But In contrast, least people prefer to visit Wildlife Park & Zoo. And Also, in the Theme Parks, type people most visited Blackpool Pleasure Beach the most(almost half 라는 점을 활용해서 써주실 수도 있을 것 같아요). First of all, the Theme Parks type was surveyed 38%(표현이 어색합니다. 38% of people responded that they visited Theme Parks 이런 식으로 써주시면 됩니다.), the most popular type. It is There was a little difference between the secondly popular type and the most popular type. The secondly popular type is(윗 문단에서도 그렇고, 지금 서술해주실 때 동사의 시제가 현재형과 과거형을 넘나들며 쓰이고 있는데, 과거형으로 통일시켜서 써주시는 것을 추천드립니다.) Museums & Galleries. It was surveyed 37%. But there are more than twice difference between the secondly and third popular trip type. The third popular trip type is Historic Houses & Monuments which was surveyed by 16% of people. The least popular trip type is Wildlife Park & Zoo, with 9% people surveyed. (계속해서 survey 동사를 활용해주고 계시는데, 설문조사하다 라는 뜻이라서 지금 써주신 문장들에서는 뜻이 맞지 않습니다. responded 로 바꾸어 써주시는 것이 자연스럽습니다.) Among the people who surveyed Theme Parks type, the 47% people visited Blackpool Pleasure Beach, it is which was almost a half. The secondly popular spot was surveyed 17%, are which was Alton Towers. And Furthermore, tthe least popular places were Chessington World of Adventures and Legoland Windsor. They surveyed the same rate, 10%. |