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It is true that the
number of young people in modern society is are increasing in several countries. I
personally believe that this phenomenon (지금과 같이 argument 라고 적게 되면 문장을 암기했다고 간주하고 더 많은 감점이 들어가므로 주의해주세요.) argument has more benefits than drawback. In this
essay, I will give reasons why I lean to an optimistic side.
To begin with, there
are certainly several benefits of the popularity of younger generation in
specific regions such as work efficiency. In other words, young people have
abilities to work more productively than the elderly (밑에 똑같은 말이 있습니다.) Although old generation has
broad knowledge of their field, youthful people are able to work in an effective
way more than old people. For example, the majority of companies prefer hiring
young employees to old workers as the former can do duties faster as well as
more efficiently. (여기도 같은 말을 반복하고 있을 뿐이고요.) This shows that increasing the number of young people has optimistic
effects on nation’s economy.
Not only that, young
people can bring about the result of increasing fertility rate which means that
there will be more and more workers in the future. In contrast, if the popularity
is accounted for large portion by old people, it rarely has a chance to rise
productive people. Take a silver town for an example. In sliver town which only
the elderly live together in some countries, no one is able to give birth to a child and it would lead to diminish the popularity within a few decades. (이 예시는 고령화 사회의 단점을 보여주지, 젊은 층이 많은 사회의 장점을 보여주지 않습니다. 수험생들이 흔히 둘을 같다고 판단하시는 경우가 많은데, 둘은 전혀 다르므로 주의해주세요.) This
illustrates that young adults could contribute to rising the popularity.
In conclusion, when
it comes to the issue that the number of young adults is more and more, I definitely
insist that it would result in positive implications on not only economy but
fertility rate. |