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The pie charts illustrate the energy usage in
an average Australian household, and gas emissions from the Australian household
greenhouse. (이렇게 띄어주세요!)
Overall, it is apparent that the proportions
of heating, water heating are the most used (Used 라는 단어로는 첫 번째 표만 설명할 수 있습니다. 두 번째 표는 use 와 아무런 상관이 없고, emission 에 해당돼요. 그런데 지금처럼 싹 묶어서 use 라고 표현하면 적절하지 않습니다.) in both Australian household and greenhouse
over the given charts while the proportion of cooling is less used.
According to the first chart, the most notable
feature is that all kinds of heating are occupied 72 percent of entire chart,
and it is followed by other appliances with 15 percent. The energy usage of refrigeration
and lighting show less than 10 percent each, then the percentage of cooling reached
only 2 percent as a lesser usage.
As seen in the second chart, the proportion
of water heating is most used for gas emissions at 32 percent and second highest usage is
other appliances at 28 percent. And (가급적이면 문장을 and but so 로 시작하지 말아주세요~) then the proportions of heating and refrigeration
describe similar percentage, 15 and 14 percent, respectively. The gas emissions
of lighting and cooling are less used with 8 and 3 percent each. (마지막 두 문단은 내용상 싹 바꿔주셔야 하는데, 총평에서 말씀드리겠습니다.) |